W.A.L.T: Use “show not tell”.
At Night, I was trying to sleep, but I couldn’t because I was overheating and I needed to cool down. So I thought about going to the fridge to get some cold water (I sleep with the lights on)
Suddenly, the light disappeared. I could hear a thump at same time the light disappeared. I couldn’t move at all, I didn’t want to. I was overheating more, sweating and tried to be silent as i can. After many minutes, I finally got up from my bed and charged at the switch, hoping nothing was gonna get me. The switch wasn’t working. I quickly searched for a torch and investigated was happened. The lightbulb only just fell off.
What kind of things were you able to infer in my writing?
