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Tuesday, 20 June 2017

Writing: Topic Sentences

Topic Sentences
As the man woke up from his slumber,the whistling branches crash on the side of the cabin, the planks creak as he tries  to push himself up, then thunder clashed within the storm, it frightens him.

The man notices something crawling, he looks down to find how filthy his clothes. Time passes then suddenly the sun rises and the man is relieved yet expressionless The storm winds down to a light breeze, the man steps outside, now the excruciating tormenting
that was brought time him has finally ended.


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  1. Anonymous21 June 2017 at 13:36

    Hi Marcus,

    I love some of the words you used like, 'clashed' and 'expressionless'. Why did you make this story? Next time maybe add, why you made this story.

    Prudence,
    Yaldhurst Model School

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  2. Anonymous27 July 2017 at 11:51

    Hello Marcus




    Love your story I think you use good words sometimes. I find the story confusing but this one is good I didnt get confused.from Chloe yaldhurst model school

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