W.A.L.T: Use “show not tell”.
At Night, I was trying to sleep, but I couldn’t because I was overheating and I needed to cool down. So I thought about going to the fridge to get some cold water (I sleep with the lights on)
Suddenly, the light disappeared. I could hear a thump at same time the light disappeared. I couldn’t move at all, I didn’t want to. I was overheating more, sweating and tried to be silent as i can. After many minutes, I finally got up from my bed and charged at the switch, hoping nothing was gonna get me. The switch wasn’t working. I quickly searched for a torch and investigated was happened. The lightbulb only just fell off.
What kind of things were you able to infer in my writing?
hey there Marcus it is Kurtis and i would just like to say great work on creating this piece of writing i think it is great. it keeped me reading just by the title and when i keeped on reading i was amazed on what you have written. i don't think i need to give you any feed bck because i think there is nothing you need to work on.
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